<p class="ql-block">@所有人</p><p class="ql-block">華夏微型詩社第545期周周發(fā)同題創(chuàng)作開始了。</p><p class="ql-block"> 歡迎詩友們參與微型詩寫作！請早日構(gòu)思打磨！</p><p class="ql-block">備注：</p><p class="ql-block">1、投稿、收稿時間：</p><p class="ql-block">6月9日晚上7點——10點。</p><p class="ql-block">2、每人選投一首微型詩。</p><p class="ql-block">3、請單獨發(fā)帖，不要自行接龍，由巴山一松老師統(tǒng)一收稿。</p><p class="ql-block">4、稿件選編到美篇，并由詩社老師予以點評。</p><p class="ql-block">5、本期題目：</p><p class="ql-block">①《難忘師恩》 </p><p class="ql-block">②《躍龍門》</p><p class="ql-block">6.出題老師：岐麟散人</p><p class="ql-block">7、交流時可交流兩首，投稿時只選投一首，收稿只收一首，點評也只點評一首。</p><p class="ql-block">8.優(yōu)秀作品推薦“微詩坊”。</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/行天 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">考場戰(zhàn)意連闖三關(guān) </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">換羽后———</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一朝風(fēng)起云煙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “換羽、風(fēng)起云煙”有氣勢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/古墨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">如今，也站上三尺講臺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">舉手與投足</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">像極了，當(dāng)年的您</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “長大后我就成了您”，真好，后繼有人，為靈魂工程師點贊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">懷念恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文／吉新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">講臺上一站，站成云梯</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我的書包裝滿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)織成的春蠶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “師者所以傳道授業(yè)解惑也”，為學(xué)生寧愿學(xué)春蠶吐絲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/付光渝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">粉筆灰飄落成塵 染白了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你的雙鬢 卻點亮我</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">懵懂世界的 星辰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 感恩老師教誨，從懵懂中清醒，星辰在腳下。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陳果果</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">三尺講臺刻滿歲月詩行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">用知識甘霖澆灌夢想</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">扶我在漫長人生路上起航</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 讀:三尺講臺留下無數(shù)師者的故事，學(xué)高為師，行為世范。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/趙正霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陌上行 望夜空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那盞星燈 一束光射來 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">如您的眼神 碰撞我心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 高贊老師，如星燈、似光束，用愛撐起學(xué)子的明天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/康秀炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">十年暗礁修行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只為浪尖一躍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從此天高海闊</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 把寒窗十年苦讀喻為暗礁修行，有新意，后兩句點出詩題，指出光明前景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/東方虹雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">攢足了十二載的陽光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">以筆作竿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">縱身騰起的浪花 化成彩云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 把知識積累比喻為攢足“陽光”，新穎有詩意，末句美好的前程在向人們招手，寫出躍龍門后的喜悅。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/楊繼廷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">珍藏著</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">未曾謀面</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">編輯老師的退稿信</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 分讀是著重強調(diào)，連讀是完整的事件。因“未曾謀面”而特別感恩，所以有“珍藏”之行為。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蘇有明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">月牙倒懸作門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍起吻碎波光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">何鱗題名金榜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 看似有情節(jié)細(xì)節(jié)，實有釋題之嫌疑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/丹霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">十二年的教育痕跡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鐫刻學(xué)生心中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">永遠(yuǎn)不能抹去</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 一個“鐫刻”有力度，一個“永遠(yuǎn)”表難忘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/春天的故事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">彩虹，不是你的光環(huán)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你是燈塔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">照亮夜航人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 采用對比來表達(dá)老師在學(xué)生我心目中的作用地位，把師生關(guān)系比作燈塔與夜航人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/岐麟散人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">諄諄點亮孩童的心燈</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">無數(shù)個求知的黑夜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">被一個個身影 破曉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 首句將老師比作“心燈”，而后展開。二三兩句設(shè)喻，“破曉”有畫面有力量/。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陽光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">通往三行的路上</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你引領(lǐng)我</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">要撿拾最美的風(fēng)景</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松筒評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 尾句不錯，平實的語言豐富的內(nèi)涵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔡厚炳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒窗 蟄伏潛能文字</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只待妙筆牽引</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紙上 就能開出傲嬌的花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 獨特構(gòu)思，妙筆在此處生花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/周其林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">溪河江海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">各有各的風(fēng)采</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">閱盡千帆 蛻變</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松筒評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 有躍龍門之榮光，實乃厚積而薄發(fā)。三行再次告訴人們沒有隨隨便便的成功。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/小乙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沖天而起鱗光耀眼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">壺口捧出彩虹橋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一朝 圓夢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 麟光、彩虹橋，扣題，感覺尾句弱了一點。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/吳琳玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">待你騰空時</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">最真的夢 照進現(xiàn)實</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">而你成了自己的神話</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “騰空”扣題，“夢/照進現(xiàn)實”俗語活用，“你成了自己的神話”新穎提氣。成功的一首，贊一個??</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/古道白楊</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一巴掌 疼徹神經(jīng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">觸及靈魂的喚醒 競神奇復(fù)活</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那已亡去的夢 福我三生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 以“一個巴掌”切入，觸及神經(jīng)，也觸及靈魂。一點突破，整首出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/書蟲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">學(xué)海中蹚逆襲之路</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">披鱗片的鎧甲，翻越書山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">撥開云霧，可吟唱青天白日</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “書山有路勤為徑，學(xué)海無涯苦作舟。”化用無痕，撥云見日。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">墨客吟/寧夏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">搖晃的思維亂了平仄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">經(jīng)敲打并雕琢后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">跳出一行行靈動的文字</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 老師既是知識的灌溉者，也是靈魂工程師，作品形象地表達(dá)出對師恩的敬意和感激。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/老妖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一支小竹鞭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">敲醒懵懂的年少時光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從此心寄存那尊高大雕像</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “一支小竹鞭”形象獨到；“敲醒懵懂的年少時光”新穎別致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/綠柳楓</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">教室后門的腳步聲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">至今仍在</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">輕輕叩響我的青春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “教室后門的腳步聲”，獨到的細(xì)節(jié)；“輕輕叩響我的青春”，獨到的詞語搭配。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">透過兩片玻璃無數(shù)圈圈</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">見樹苗長到凌絕頂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">方感嘆一句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “兩片玻璃無數(shù)圈圈”，細(xì)節(jié)抓的準(zhǔn)；“樹苗長到臨絕頂”，化用巧妙，富有新意的表達(dá)。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/空谷幽蘭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雛燕彷徨在風(fēng)雨中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">是誰口吐芬芳，揮舞教桿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">指明一條陽光大道</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 比喻得體，反問有力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/八鄉(xiāng)人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">米蘭飄香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">火把花盛開</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一次又一次的合影</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 畢業(yè)季，師生合影情景！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/晗羲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">筆粉飄落與紅筆勾畫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">日益而成塊塊田壟、條條江河</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">結(jié)出星光，魚翔碧空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 觀察細(xì)膩，角度新穎。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/故鄉(xiāng)人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒窗里，一粒粒文字卯足了勁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">借六月陽光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紙上，看筆墨騰飛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> "寒窗"借代學(xué)子，"六月"借代高考季。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">躍龍門</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/雪兒懷春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從逆流從悟出那絲快感</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">倍增勇氣鼓勁跳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">掌聲和鮮花墊起一條新通道</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 抓住了細(xì)節(jié)"逆流"。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/往往醉后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">粉筆灰 飄落成雪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">染白那青絲里</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">卻藏著您 永不褪色的春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 定格"粉筆灰"，展開深情而浪漫的想象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘恩師</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/張士杰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那盞熬星的燈</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在夜批改的作業(yè)本上</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鈐印為我生命的朝陽</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 末行″鈴印"似乎是比喻的本體，更像一個難以忘懷的事件，尤其喻體"生命的朝陽"，意義多么重大！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">難忘師恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/巴山一松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">嘮叨的“廢話”終成良言</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">成為他之后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我把做人的根本，一屆屆往下傳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 首行寫出感悟，后兩行通過寫出"師恩"對詩人人生的影響，反襯老師的人格魅力。</span></p>