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<![CDATA[<tt id="36kw3"></tt>]]> | 鶯啼翠柳迎朝日 <p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">一、出句對句</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">二.</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">自撰詩聯(lián)</b></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025.5.7</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出題與點(diǎn)評老師程永紅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………～～～～………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趙文英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕話桃紅研畫聲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕語桃紅艷畫屏；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">又見平遙城腳下，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">歡聲歌舞溢溫馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評: 平仄相對，“翠柳”“桃紅”寬對，“研畫聲”不知其意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………～～～～～～……………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞春風(fēng)送暖暉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評：上下聯(lián)共同渲染春天的溫馨，春風(fēng)/翠柳寬對，下聯(lián)暖暉若換一種寫法就更好了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………～～～……………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程樹蘭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶴舞蒼松擁錦霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評：形對意聯(lián)，統(tǒng)一和諧的畫面，給人一種詩意的感受。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廉永明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日，鷺戲清波映晚暉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注，春暖花開汾河畔天鷺飛翔，好一美景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，動(dòng)靜相襯，畫面感強(qiáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0); font-size:22px;">………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉寬應(yīng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迊朝日：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞青云送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:音韻和諧，生動(dòng)歡愉的自然畫面。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">武達(dá)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞長空醉暖春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:形對意聯(lián)，音韻和諧，共同描繪春日生機(jī)盎然景色，營造明快歡悅的意境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郝建富</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪清波染晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，生動(dòng)形象，畫面美好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">下期作業(yè)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉紅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句對句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浪卷金鱗攬曉煙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰詩聯(lián):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">客旅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燈昏酒醉依鄉(xiāng)月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笛怨魂銷夢戍邊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，視聽結(jié)合，通過“攬”擬人化動(dòng)作，賦予自然景物靈動(dòng)感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁小彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迊朝日：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鷺立蒼礁賞綺霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:形象擬人，描繪了春日清晨的生機(jī)與寧靜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁金翠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝶戲黃花戀暖風(fēng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:音韻和諧，勾勒出鶯歌蝶舞，柳翠花開，陽光明媚的晨景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">許晉武</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迊朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞紅桃沐曉風(fēng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:運(yùn)用擬人，動(dòng)靜結(jié)合，描繪春日清晨生機(jī)盎然的景象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趙顯勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞藍(lán)天送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，音韻和諧，給人春天萬物復(fù)蘇，和諧歡愉的氛圍感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">對句：鶴舞青松唱碧霄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 一一郭保旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:形對意聯(lián)，清新高雅，自然和諧，生機(jī)盎然，富有詩意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">張期望</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕啄春泥到我家。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，構(gòu)思巧妙，描繪了春日生機(jī)盎然的景象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郭彩萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪和風(fēng)沐綺霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:形象生動(dòng)，富有動(dòng)態(tài)美感和詩意，春天充滿生機(jī)和希望。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">魚戲青荷逐晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:形象、生動(dòng)、細(xì)膩，展現(xiàn)了自然界的生機(jī)與和諧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">魚戲青荷醉夕輝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:這聯(lián)“醉”字用的恰到好處。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………～……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劉建和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕戲黃花戀晚晴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">自撰詩聯(lián):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五絕《春語》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕戲黃花戀晚晴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一派春光無限好，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">唯期日月更溫馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，形對意聯(lián)，音韻和諧，畫面生動(dòng)，生機(jī)盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">崔曉清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鸕舞藍(lán)波送暮光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:兩聯(lián)都對仗工整，形對意聯(lián)，自然和諧，生機(jī)勃勃。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">…………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陰彩桃</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鵲唱芳庭送錦書。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，想象豐富，萬物復(fù)蘇，喜慶祥和，春日溫馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">溫丕彪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪彤云送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:對仗工整，形對意聯(lián)，音韻和諧，畫面生動(dòng)，形象美好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~"</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王海良作業(yè)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句對句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶴舞青松醉睌霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰詩聯(lián):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">賞油菜花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一一步韻李會(huì)長五律·小雨次日賞油萊花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜雨洗香塵，田疇十里新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花開飛鳥喜，蕊綻舞蜂勤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金浪香迷客，翠波韻喜人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今雖歸故梓，夢意醉三分。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評:通過鶯、鶴、枊、松意象，以生靈與景物的和諧共舞，描繪一幅生機(jī)盎然，超脫塵世的自然畫卷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句對句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程永紅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鶯啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝶舞晴光繞竹門。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評： 彩蝶飛舞，晴光灑照，柴扉竹門，好一幅農(nóng)家宜居的質(zhì)樸畫圖。使人如臨其境，耐人尋味。佳作當(dāng)贊！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點(diǎn)評老師趙顯勇</span></p>