<p class="ql-block">@所有人</p><p class="ql-block">華夏微型詩(shī)社第541期周周發(fā)同題創(chuàng)作開始了。</p><p class="ql-block"> 歡迎詩(shī)友們參與微型詩(shī)寫作!請(qǐng)?jiān)缛諛?gòu)思打磨!</p><p class="ql-block">備注:</p><p class="ql-block">1、投稿、收稿時(shí)間:</p><p class="ql-block">5月13日晚上7點(diǎn)——10點(diǎn)。</p><p class="ql-block">2、每人選投一首微型詩(shī)。</p><p class="ql-block">3、請(qǐng)單獨(dú)發(fā)帖,不要自行接龍,由巴山一松老師統(tǒng)一收稿。</p><p class="ql-block">4、稿件選編到美篇,并由詩(shī)社老師予以點(diǎn)評(píng)。</p><p class="ql-block">5、本期題目:</p><p class="ql-block">①《小站》 </p><p class="ql-block">②《沙棗花》</p><p class="ql-block">6.出題老師:昨夜星</p><p class="ql-block">7、交流時(shí)可交流兩首,投稿時(shí)只選投一首,收稿只收一首,點(diǎn)評(píng)也只點(diǎn)評(píng)一首。</p><p class="ql-block">8.優(yōu)秀作品推薦“微詩(shī)坊”。</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文 / 綠色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">汽笛長(zhǎng)鳴,驚醒小憩的夢(mèng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">揮揮手,彌補(bǔ)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">來不及記下你名字的遺憾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 末句點(diǎn)題,小站雖小,卻也是希望的起點(diǎn)和遠(yuǎn)方的憇息地,直白語(yǔ)言,樸實(shí)無華。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/森林雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">日和月都是多年摯友</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)跑過來</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">又與你握了握手</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微詩(shī)借“日、月、風(fēng)”三個(gè)意象,寫出小站的堅(jiān)守,末句擬人手法,言盡而意未盡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">趙正霞/青海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">迎送的目光 層層</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">零落成花絮 擠滿心窗 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每一瓣 生香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 詩(shī)人以特定的場(chǎng)境,寫出小站的人來人往,這里有親情的延伸,有友情的期盼,道出人生百味,做到情景交融。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/丹霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">誰懂你 明白你</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每天目送的旅客很少</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">發(fā)生的故事很多</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 以反問口吻,寫出小站雖小,價(jià)值卻大的歷史功能,語(yǔ)言樸實(shí)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/午后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)過端午</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">當(dāng)鵝黃色鈴聲在達(dá)坂城縈繞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">才想起康巴爾汗早已遠(yuǎn)嫁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:“風(fēng)過端午”點(diǎn)明時(shí)間,“鵝黃色鈴聲”以通感手法勾勒沙棗花形態(tài)與聲響,畫面鮮活?!斑_(dá)坂城”地域符號(hào)疊加“康巴爾汗遠(yuǎn)嫁”的傳說,賦予沙棗花厚重的歷史感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/付光渝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">褶皺的月光落在枝頭 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">苦澀釀成的蜜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)一吹 便碎成思念</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 月光“褶皺”化滄桑,苦澀釀蜜見堅(jiān)韌,末句借風(fēng)寫思念,全詩(shī)在自然意象滲透情感,賦予“沙棗花”全新的概念。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/康秀炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一間候車室</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">三五人影 幾分鐘???lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">滿載十萬詩(shī)和遠(yuǎn)方</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 一二句寫實(shí),借候車室、三五人影極顯其小,而末句用夸張的手法寫大,“十萬詩(shī)和遠(yuǎn)方”張力無限,小空間承載大憧憬,微小中承載眾生的夢(mèng)想。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/行天 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">人生小片斷 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛轉(zhuǎn)一顆驛動(dòng)的心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">站牌 終成記憶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 岐麟散人淺評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 小站只是人生的一個(gè)“片斷”,“驛動(dòng)的心”是不甘命運(yùn)的抗?fàn)?,是謀取幸福的力量,末句站牌凝固成記憶,寫出一種懷念與不舍。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/古道白楊</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">曾經(jīng)擁驚喜送憂傷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">情感故事 被飛輪甩出空白</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只好 填充些回憶與滄桑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 一擁、一送,說出了小站的特質(zhì);空白、填充,相互呼應(yīng)。有情有景,自然流暢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陳果果</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)沙中站成倔強(qiáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">金黃色的花瓣裹著月光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">把苦澀歲月釀成蜜糖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 以沙棗花擬人,倔強(qiáng)的身影恍若就在眼前。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/東方虹雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一行送別 幾堆重逢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">叮嚀在特產(chǎn)袋里打結(jié)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">離愁化著汽笛聲聲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 特產(chǎn)袋,這個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)有場(chǎng)景感,也富有時(shí)代感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/小乙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那年練兵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">此地屯出段段北洋往事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春筍了多少變換的大王旗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 屯里,暗含著北國(guó);春筍,暗含著江南。大地廣闊,歷史宏闊,小站默默無言。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陽(yáng)光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">記錄奔波的日子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">見證重逢的歡喜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">載滿幾多離愁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 記錄、見證、載滿,小站是一冊(cè)無言的史者。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/老妖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">酸楚在濃情上演</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">擁抱過后無盡淚水暢流</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">忍受孤獨(dú)換生活無憂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 一個(gè)小站,上演著永遠(yuǎn)的悲歡離合。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春天的故事/河南</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">大漠上一抹朝霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">輝映駝鈴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">甜香,是姑娘對(duì)守邊戰(zhàn)士的吻</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 詩(shī)意與作者網(wǎng)名有點(diǎn)暗合的意思,角度選擇戍邊,有獨(dú)到之處。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/華與街探長(zhǎng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每當(dāng)汽笛撕開霧靄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">月臺(tái)就吐出</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一串潮濕的鄉(xiāng)愁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長(zhǎng)風(fēng)簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “撕開”“吐出”都有新意,感覺“鄉(xiāng)愁”老舊了一些,再加把勁?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/八鄉(xiāng)人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">三五分鐘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">上下的旅客都彼此陌生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只是熟悉那匆匆的神色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 別停留在表面陳述,通過一點(diǎn),折射一段時(shí)光,或表達(dá)出自己深層次的觀點(diǎn)和感悟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/岐麟散人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雖不起眼 卻承載了你我的夢(mèng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從這里</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">奔赴彼此的詩(shī)與遠(yuǎn)方</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “雖不起眼”彰顯了小站在自己心目中的地位和重要性。而結(jié)尾開放性結(jié)尾,又能引起一些人感情上的共鳴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/葦強(qiáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">淡黃色,不被曬干的眼淚</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">點(diǎn)綴枝頭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)吹,幽香飄過五月的荒漠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 透過外部描寫,借物抒寫自己對(duì)沙棗花的贊美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陳桂娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">候車室</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">幾條褪色的長(zhǎng)椅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">又一次目送 起身追夢(mèng)的離人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 這個(gè)小切口,自然,以小見大。“褪色長(zhǎng)椅”說明小站的久遠(yuǎn)。“目送離人”是揪心的,夢(mèng)想在遠(yuǎn)方,不得不再次別離。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/周其林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在時(shí)光的隧道穿行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">高光與低谷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">就象這鄉(xiāng)音一樣 夠味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 覺得有點(diǎn)抽象。用具體的意象,凸顯出畫面,效果似乎好些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “象”應(yīng)是“像”。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/空谷幽蘭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">承載悲歡與離合</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">打包夢(mèng)想,裹緊期盼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鄉(xiāng)村種子,開花在城市</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 集中一點(diǎn)寫透就好。寫得具體形象些,通過一個(gè)意象,或一個(gè)場(chǎng)景,營(yíng)造出詩(shī)之意境之美。用真情實(shí)感,創(chuàng)造屬于個(gè)人獨(dú)特的感受。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/書蟲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">載不動(dòng)太多離愁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">終是被時(shí)代的列車拋棄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">綠色記憶,荒蕪在那個(gè)春天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 好!起句詩(shī)的味道就出來了。小站,最終被時(shí)代拋棄,但留在小站的點(diǎn)點(diǎn)滴滴,難忘的時(shí)光,大都會(huì)記得。小站頹廢了,就在一個(gè)盎然的春天。作者用“綠色”反襯出自己情感的微妙變化。那些充滿生機(jī),活潑的記憶,偏偏在春天荒蕪了,作者內(nèi)心是不平靜的。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微詩(shī)三行內(nèi)容豐富,情感表達(dá)到位。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/墨客吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">攬收一路風(fēng)景,旅客</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">載滿惆悵打點(diǎn)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">生活卡住歲月咽喉運(yùn)行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 前兩句平靜描述,用小詞,表情達(dá)意。后面一句,不好理解,也顯突兀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/綠柳楓</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">空蕩蕩的鐵軌打了個(gè)結(jié)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">而我仍在等</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一列倒著行駛的時(shí)光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 三行簡(jiǎn)潔,精練,用簡(jiǎn)單寓意。作者用“空蕩蕩”“鐵軌打結(jié)”告訴我們小站已經(jīng)結(jié)束了使命,不用了,列車也不經(jīng)過了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 等一列倒著行駛的時(shí)光,因?yàn)橛刑鄽g聲笑語(yǔ),故事,記憶,讓自己難忘,成了自己人生旅途的一部分風(fēng)景。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/吉新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">這是我最在意的位置</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">生銹的鐵軌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">纏繞著他鄉(xiāng)和故鄉(xiāng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 作者用簡(jiǎn)練三句,道出小站在心上的重要性。那沒有盡頭之鐵軌,雖已生銹,但在故鄉(xiāng)與他鄉(xiāng)的路途中,載過我的青春、歡樂、憂傷、夢(mèng)想。逝去的小站,永遠(yuǎn)會(huì)存放在心上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/往往醉后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">捧出 碎雪般心事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">把苦澀釀成蜜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">芬芳 便是寫給荒漠的情詩(shī)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 一種真誠(chéng),一種真心,只不過所有努力,都化作荒漠的一種愜意和慰藉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沙棗花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/雪兒懷春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">無需炫耀 剝粒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">世間最動(dòng)感情話去品鑒香濃</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">芬芳持續(xù)守健康</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 樸素?zé)o華的沙棗樹。鄉(xiāng)村的五月,棗花香彌漫在半空,五臟六腑都感覺到愜意。感覺風(fēng)都是香的。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔡厚炳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一端扯痛故鄉(xiāng)的肋骨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一端延至璀璨燈光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">游子 眼眸裝滿無助</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 小站勾起了思鄉(xiāng)情結(jié)。他鄉(xiāng)的游子,不經(jīng)意望一眼,已是淚光閃閃了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/張士杰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你破譯枕木的密碼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我丈量月光的距離</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">而站名 被風(fēng)含成沙粒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 虛實(shí)結(jié)合中把小站寫得詩(shī)意滿滿?!罢久伙L(fēng)含成沙?!毕胂笊鷦?dòng)形象,小站之小一下子就凸顯出來了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/故鄉(xiāng)人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">???,時(shí)間太短</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">心中思念</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">也足夠,把你那節(jié)車皮塞滿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 江南風(fēng)高手!以感情,感覺、感受入筆。微詩(shī)小巧、利落,感情真摯、熱烈,調(diào)動(dòng),撥弄起了讀者的情感弦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 以小見大,以情切入,以情結(jié)尾,升華,微詩(shī)之魅力無限。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小站</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/巴山一松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">身子單薄,思念同重</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">365個(gè)日夜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">仍以守望者的名義,等你歸來</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡(jiǎn)評(píng):</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微詩(shī)直抒胸臆。“身子單薄”寫小站特征?!笆赝薄暗取睂懰寄睢?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微詩(shī)用擬人手法,讓小站有情有意了。表面寫小站,其實(shí)是在寫人。借物喻人,抒發(fā)感情,表達(dá)真心,彰顯旨意。</span></p>