<p class="ql-block">@所有人</p><p class="ql-block">華夏微型詩社第538期周周發(fā)同題創(chuàng)作開始了。</p><p class="ql-block"> 歡迎詩友們參與微型詩寫作！請(qǐng)?jiān)缛諛?gòu)思打磨！</p><p class="ql-block">備注：</p><p class="ql-block">1、投稿、收稿時(shí)間：</p><p class="ql-block">2025年4月15日晚上7點(diǎn)——10點(diǎn)。</p><p class="ql-block">2、每人選投一首微型詩。</p><p class="ql-block">3、請(qǐng)單獨(dú)發(fā)帖，不要自行接龍，由岐麟散人老師統(tǒng)一收稿。</p><p class="ql-block">4、稿件選編到美篇，并由詩社老師予以點(diǎn)評(píng)。</p><p class="ql-block">5、本期題目：</p><p class="ql-block">①《讀書》</p><p class="ql-block">②《白發(fā)》</p><p class="ql-block">6.出題老師：岐麟散人</p><p class="ql-block">7、交流時(shí)可交流兩首，投稿時(shí)只選投一首，收稿只收一首，點(diǎn)評(píng)也只點(diǎn)評(píng)一首。</p><p class="ql-block">8.優(yōu)秀作品推薦“微詩坊”。</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">順序1</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/小乙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">將滿頭黑夜捻成白晝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一絲絲光陰的故事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從少壯讀到暮年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:首句從黑夜到白晝，盡顯滄桑之感，“捻”字有力，而末句少壯到暮年寫出詩人的無奈與傷感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/午后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在疏林隱藏起所有云朵之后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋山，不再與路過的風(fēng)寒暄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:選擇了不同意象，借“云朵、秋山、風(fēng)”用擬人手法，寫出對(duì)歲月流逝的嘆息。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">吉新/廣東</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">不要刻意遮掩蒼老</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我已經(jīng)愛上</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你頭頂流動(dòng)的云層</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀:直白語道出真情實(shí)感，猶喜末句。詩人借代手法高明，以云層代白發(fā)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔣越紅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一場雪 落在發(fā)梢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">斑駁的記憶獨(dú)對(duì)新月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">敘述歡聲與淚痕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀：以雪喻發(fā)，借斑駁記憶與新月，融入歡聲淚痕，盡顯歲月滄桑之感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/丹霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">和古人對(duì)話</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">同外星人交流</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你的牽手 是我的唯一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀：把讀書比作和古人對(duì)話、與外星人交流，想象獨(dú)特，突出讀書的另類體驗(yàn)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔣越紅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">翻開記憶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">與智者對(duì)坐</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">思緒在文字中馳騁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀：一二句是動(dòng)作，末句是結(jié)果，盡顯讀書的魅力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/現(xiàn)實(shí)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">符號(hào)，字句間跳躍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一頁春風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">靈魂里，豐盈多少光陰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀：從符號(hào)字句入手，以春風(fēng)為意象，展現(xiàn)讀書對(duì)陶冶人情操的重要性。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/盧春杰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每天晚上聞聞墨香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">時(shí)間一長</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">我也變得香了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人淺讀：以聞墨香變香表達(dá)讀書對(duì)人潛移默化的作用 。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">順序2</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/八鄉(xiāng)人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">睡前的盛宴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讓眼睛亮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">心更敞亮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 心敞亮，算是說到點(diǎn)子上了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/執(zhí)著</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">彎月，母親的眼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">游子何時(shí)歸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">青絲，祈盼中熬成雪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 青絲，熬成了雪，入骨！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陳桂娟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">不再糾結(jié)青絲變暮雪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那是歲月沉淀后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">留下的最純顏色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 表達(dá)過于散文化了，建議多用詩的語言，奇崛一些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/付光渝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋風(fēng)數(shù)著湖中的蘆葦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每一根都訴說滄桑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">要與晚上的月光爭輝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 秋風(fēng)數(shù)著湖中的蘆葦，這一句出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/綠色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">蘸著秋的味道，研磨一首</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">成熟的詩，歲月饋贈(zèng)幾縷霜花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沒理由推辭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 秋的味道，成熟，幾縷霜花，鋪墊很到位了?！皼]理由推辭”雖然直白了些，里面卻含了多少艱辛和付出啊，隱隱有耐之意。但從老人與子女的角度來理解，何曾沒有無怨無悔之意？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陳興茂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">是你 融進(jìn)我生命</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">于是 深深漩入你的故事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">苦苦尋找自己的夢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 有書讀，能讀書，不愧為天下第一等好事。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/岐麟散人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲月濃縮成閱歷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">消失的青絲中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">隱匿著步履踉蹌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 這個(gè)“濃縮”好，讓時(shí)光不能匆匆溜走，要有所行動(dòng)，有所得，踉蹌也是成長的必經(jīng)之路?！鞍装l(fā)”是來過的最有力證明！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔡厚炳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">努力啃 使勁刨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">那條小徑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">留下倔強(qiáng)攀登的腳印</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞長風(fēng)簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 啃、刨，說出了讀書的不二法門。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">順序3</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/葦強(qiáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">走進(jìn)黃金屋，牽手顏如玉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">與愛同步</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陽光明媚無垠的知識(shí)世界</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):″與愛同步″，即是讀書惠獲，也是讀書的真諦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/道是無晴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">翻開一段光陰，給還在</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雨巷中徘徊的那縷丁香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">找一家能從夢中醒來的客棧</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):余香裊裊，欲結(jié)情怨啦！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/康秀炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鄉(xiāng)音未改</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">往事紛紛揚(yáng)揚(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從晃動(dòng)的一頭蘆花飄出</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):秋冬時(shí)節(jié)，詩人回到故鄉(xiāng)，彌望的是紛紛揚(yáng)揚(yáng)的蘆花，多么熟悉呀，它的青春，我的青春，往事歷歷，逢秋搖落，皆白了頭，回不去了，感喟萬千！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/老妖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從一二到中庸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">十?dāng)?shù)個(gè)春冬夜熬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丑小鴨禪修白天鵝的辛酸腳印</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):"一二″、"中庸"、"十?dāng)?shù)個(gè)春冬"、″丑小鴨禪修白天鵝"、"辛酸腳印″，這種借代十比喻，貫穿全詩，讀來自然親切！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文／喜陽柳保宅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">頭上，這片銀霜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">藏著我一生的</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">辛甜與酸苦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):比喻貼切，還可深入細(xì)膩些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/書蟲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">掙扎于暗夜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">也被暗夜抽走墨色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">留幾莖通透，抒寫秋意</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):虛實(shí)結(jié)合，擬人生動(dòng)，末行耐品！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/高峰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">月光 偷偷下凡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在母親的發(fā)間定居</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">從此 故鄉(xiāng)多了霜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):一落筆，詩人就將暗線玉砌:永恒的"月光"——永恒的歲月，永恒的思念，思念中，母親一天天老去，白發(fā)一天天增多，可是詩人我身在異鄉(xiāng)，不能膝下孝敬，心中無限惆悵！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陽光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲月 這一款隱形染發(fā)劑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">不經(jīng)意間就會(huì)偷偷地漂白</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你的青絲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域簡評(píng):比喻大氣新穎，關(guān)鍵是"歲月"二字共情煽情！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">順序4</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/空谷幽蘭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">辛勞攢積的銀絲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">或稀或濃，斑駁于頭頂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">購置生活的解結(jié)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：解結(jié)：消除郁結(jié)；解開疙瘩?。本詩可能表達(dá)一種釋然或豁達(dá)，人有白發(fā)終活通透。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/古道白楊</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲月結(jié)在頭頂?shù)乃?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">滄桑成 一種標(biāo)志</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">高尚 令兒女膜拜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：兒女理解到父母之不易，而感恩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/ 刀郎公子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一瞬間，時(shí)間的使者快跑到</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">它對(duì)星星訴說著</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲月痕跡的故事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：首句不好理解，似乎不通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/墨客吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">喚醒紙面上的小精靈</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">納入歲月起舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">積攢記憶淘洗瘦弱的思緒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：人在讀書中成長壯大。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/張士杰 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">月光垂落的絲線 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">打撈半生沉浮 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雪潮 在鬢角決堤 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：一個(gè)“決堤”讓人亮眼，讓人心動(dòng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/森林雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋天到了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">父親，滿頭蘆花飛揚(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">濕了眼眶，涼了心月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：父親人生秋天的的白發(fā)讓兒女動(dòng)容。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/劍風(fēng)使者</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">幾綹碎銀買斷光陰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">細(xì)數(shù)滄桑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在一壺月光里，沉浮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：簡短三行訴說著人生不易。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/周其林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一壺老酒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歷經(jīng)歲月蒼桑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">醇香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：歷經(jīng)蒼桑，終得智慧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/東方虹雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">光陰鍍上一頭銀絲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">借夕陽梳理昨天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">滄桑的故事情節(jié) 跌宕起伏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松簡評(píng)：回憶里，人生總是充滿感慨。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">順序5</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白頭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/雪兒懷春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">未退休已霜雪壓頂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲月梳理的辛勤痕跡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">粉筆灰塵感染職業(yè)通病</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 起句不錯(cuò)！后兩句顯弱些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/家鄉(xiāng)小河</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">似魚兒暢游海洋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">忘卻功名利祿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">翩翩一身輕……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 讀書是輕松愉悅的，像魚兒游來游去一樣自由，隨心所欲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/往往醉后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">每天 文字里暢游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">頁碼就要超過年齡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">卻依然翻閱 生命的回聲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 整體思路，構(gòu)思，連貫，流暢。“頁碼要超過年齡”是說讀書久，時(shí)間長遠(yuǎn)。結(jié)尾的虛寫，給人留下想象。較成功一首。有內(nèi)涵，有自己的感悟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/江南風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">——剃光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">青絲皆已盡力</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">涂一抹夕陽，羞羞時(shí)間</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 作者從一個(gè)側(cè)面構(gòu)思?！扒嘟z”變“白發(fā)”有自然規(guī)律，也有生活的壓力和不幸。伍子胥過昭關(guān)，一夜白了頭。不論怎樣，作者都是喟嘆，生活中有些事情，也是力不從心，沒有辦法阻擋的！好在，還有一抹夕陽棲息頭頂，遮掩一時(shí)的丑，足矣！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/趙正霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">扛起思維的犁鏵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">犁開三尺生宣 文字的果實(shí)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">掛滿心枝 墨香致遠(yuǎn)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 開篇思路不錯(cuò)！“黑香致遠(yuǎn)”這些詞匯，盡量別用在三行微詩中。從一點(diǎn)生發(fā)出去，寫出屬于自己的“讀書”感悟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀 書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/行天 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歷歷文字造型</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">入味人間煙火 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">濃縮了全球風(fēng)云 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 偏說理，而且用了大詞。從小處著手，方好寫。偏重在書上，而忽略讀之意上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/綠柳楓</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">知識(shí)的波浪每翻動(dòng)一頁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">在文字海洋遨游的靈魂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">就被光，洗禮一次</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 讀書能帶來愉悅，洗滌靈魂足矣！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白發(fā)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陽帽雨傘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">為過往代言</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">特別強(qiáng)調(diào)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">坎坷與泥濘，辛勞和淚水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 用“為過往代言”闡釋了“白發(fā)”在自己心目中的認(rèn)識(shí)和頓悟?！翱部馈薄澳酀簟薄靶羷凇薄皽I水”分別隱喻生活中的苦樂酸咸，正是因?yàn)檫@些原因，讓黑發(fā)早早變成了“白發(fā)”。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">讀書</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/巴山一松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">學(xué)海是無涯，但無須苦作舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">此生甘做一尾魚</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">將心和身沉溺，徜徉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星簡評(píng)：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 學(xué)海無涯，苦也好，著迷，沉浸也罷，只要自己快樂著，愜意著，充實(shí)著就好！</span></p>