<p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">【芳草杯】第十五期掃碼對句小賽，對句采用掃碼交卷，交卷即退，不得停留。匿名點(diǎn)評。（一人一句，不同思路多投友情支持，排名不得獎）</span></p><p class="ql-block">出 句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">時(shí)間：2025.4.11(20：00)~2025.4.12（20：00）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">眾 評：梧桐 拜友弘詩 清心 文心</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">?</span><a href="http://www.zit.org.cn/5cdnz3gn" target="_blank" style="background-color:rgb(255, 255, 255); font-size:18px;">【芳草杯】鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨之眾評</a></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">贊 助：元 其</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">總 評：松源老農(nóng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">收 集：芳 草</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(57, 181, 74);">美篇制作：芳 草</span></p><p class="ql-block"><a href="http://www.zit.org.cn/5bm7ndb1" target="_blank" style="background-color:rgb(255, 255, 255); font-size:18px;">【芳草杯·第十四期】只恐風(fēng)狂花落去</a></p><p class="ql-block"><a href="http://www.zit.org.cn/platform/hot-discussion?mask_id=dihu5d&share_to=copy_link&user_id=28575359&uuid=413fb749b46115fee507757e5215489b&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=28575359&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=e3ad4992996f1a3038a64b0d190f6896" target="_blank" style="font-size:18px; background-color:rgb(255, 255, 255);">討論區(qū)同題·鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨</a></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">?松源老農(nóng)：本次選評依據(jù)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">1. 意象典型性（荒冢/杜宇/濁酒等清明核心意象優(yōu)先） </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">2. 情感穿透力（具象化生理反應(yīng)＞抽象心理描寫） </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">3. 聲韻和諧度（平仄協(xié)調(diào)且避免生硬用詞） </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">4. 時(shí)空縱深感（現(xiàn)實(shí)場景與回憶/想象的交織層次）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">一等獎</span></p><p class="ql-block">3.</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：病骨尤思故里親??【芳草】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：以病弱之軀反襯思念熾烈，"尤思"與"更遇"形成生理與心理的雙重困境，悲苦層次豐富。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">二等獎</span></p><p class="ql-block">8.</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：濁酒難安游子心??【天天開心】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：經(jīng)典借酒澆愁意象，"難安"與"更遇"構(gòu)成因果鏈，濁酒渾濁與清明雨清冷形成質(zhì)感對比。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">4.</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：濁淚頻沾客子襟??【芳草】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：淚濕衣襟的具象化表達(dá)，將抽象鄉(xiāng)愁轉(zhuǎn)化為可觸的生理反應(yīng)，"頻沾"二字動態(tài)傳神。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">三等獎</span></p><p class="ql-block">13.</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：別夢常縈桑梓云【Ang.zq】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：桑梓云象征故土，"常縈"與"更遇"呼應(yīng)，夢境與現(xiàn)實(shí)交織，地域文化意蘊(yùn)深厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">18.</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客舍忍聽杜宇聲??【云朵】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：杜鵑啼血聲與客舍孤寂相融，聽覺意象強(qiáng)化隱忍悲慟，"忍聽"二字極具情感張力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">2</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢偏逢野渡風(fēng)??【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：野渡孤舟與夜雨客夢渾然天成，"偏逢"二字精準(zhǔn)對應(yīng)"更遇"，羈旅漂泊的孤獨(dú)感躍然紙上。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">優(yōu)選句</span></p><p class="ql-block">7</p><p class="ql-block">??出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客影尤悲荒冢魂??【天天開心】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：荒冢與客影的生死對照，清明掃墓場景肅穆哀婉，"尤悲"二字直擊人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">20.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢不堪杜宇聲??【弦思】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">??評??："不堪"直擊痛處，杜宇悲鳴與雨聲疊合，聽覺沖擊強(qiáng)化愁緒。后三字"杜宇聲"屬偏正結(jié)構(gòu)，與"清明雨"工整對仗。</span></p> <p class="ql-block">?25.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢何堪杜宇聲??【笛里關(guān)山】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">??評?：何堪"較"不堪"多一層詰問力度，與"更遇"虛實(shí)呼應(yīng)巧妙。杜宇聲凄厲如泣，與清明雨絲絲入扣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">46.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢頻驚杜宇聲??【瘦竹清影】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">??評?："頻驚"動態(tài)描摹入神，杜宇夜啼驚破客夢，雨聲與心悸共振。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">入圍獎</span></p><p class="ql-block">15.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：荒冢猶牽游子心【清心】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：道出鄉(xiāng)愁根源，家鄉(xiāng)荒冢里是游子牽掛的親人，凸顯游子對故土和親人的思念。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">22.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：游子總添魂夢詩【淡定】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：魂?duì)繅艨M化為詩行，文人式抒情獨(dú)特，但意象稍顯陳舊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">43.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：病骨怎禁暮柳風(fēng)【金雨】</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">評：暮柳風(fēng)暗藏節(jié)氣特征，"怎禁"凸顯肉體衰弱與精神煎熬的雙重困境。暮柳一詞生澀稍欠。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">參賽句</span></p><p class="ql-block">1.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客醉難禁楊柳風(fēng)【震撼哥】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">5.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句 : 柳調(diào)曾經(jīng)寒食風(fēng)【揮翰】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">6.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客怨常隨午夜風(fēng)【大海】</p> <p class="ql-block">9.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：病骨哪堪霜降寒【小草】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">10.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：孤館偏聞斷雁聲【琢玉】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">11.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：離念頻聞蜀魄啼【荷花】</p> <p class="ql-block">12.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：濁酒何堪落絮風(fēng)【琢玉】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">14.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：旅望難圓祭祖心【劉秋生】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">16.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：歸雁未捎故里音【愚夫】</p> <p class="ql-block">17.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：孤旅又逢寒冷風(fēng)【若水】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">19.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢時(shí)牽黃土魂【云朵】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">21.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：孑影聊斟楊柳風(fēng)【青絲羽衣】</p> <p class="ql-block">23.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢常溫桑梓燈【拜友弘詩】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">24.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢偏遭陌上風(fēng)【山旮旯子】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">26.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：老病新停濁酒杯【老丁】</p> <p class="ql-block">27.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：厄運(yùn)偏尋苦命人【老丁】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">28.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：逆旅喜逢鄉(xiāng)里人【老丁】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">29.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：歸路爭開燦爛花【笑對人生】</p> <p class="ql-block"> 30.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢常牽桑梓情【沐榕】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">31.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)）】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客路又添?xiàng)盍L(fēng)【梧桐】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">32.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：別緒難敲永漏更【山花爛漫】</p> <p class="ql-block">33.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客路偏籠寒食煙【拜友弘詩】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">34.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：酒醒難離夢境家【宋】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">35.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢何堪楊柳風(fēng)【燕燕于飛】</p> <p class="ql-block">36.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客訊尤期楊柳風(fēng)【李敬輝】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">37.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客夢頻縈先母情【雨燕】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">38.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：游子倍思家國情【文心】</p> <p class="ql-block">39.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：老酒偏添夢縈情【淡定】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">40.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：客淚偏逢寒食風(fēng)【劉學(xué)榮】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">41.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：旅宿欣溫桃李情【美西洋】</p> <p class="ql-block">42.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：病酒何堪寒食花【鄉(xiāng)間晚風(fēng)】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">44.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：瘦影只聞殘笛聲【風(fēng)徐徐】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">45.</p><p class="ql-block">出句：鄉(xiāng)愁更遇清明雨 【松源老農(nóng)】</p><p class="ql-block">對句：祖祭又添?xiàng)盍L(fēng) 【胡蘿卜】</p>