<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????感謝來訪賞讀留言，以文會友，拜賢師交流學(xué)習(xí)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">圖片/美篇圖庫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文字/上善若水（魏建華）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">配樂/唯美古風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025年4月第一篇（芳草湖）</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">詩鐘七唱?梅雪</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一唱·鳳頂格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梅開玉樹寒英醉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雪滿軒窗落絮輕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二唱·燕頷格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅梅競綻三冬凜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白雪紛飛九陌新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三唱·鳶肩格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翹首梅英香暗送</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">巡欄雪絮趣悠生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四唱·蜂腰格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">數(shù)九臘梅瞻霽月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒天林雪倚香風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五唱·鶴膝格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">空山素岫梅含淚</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曠野銀衫雪訴情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六唱·鳧脛格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">東風(fēng)朔氣催梅綻</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曉霧嵐煙化雪融</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七唱·雁足格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫苑尋幽辭暮雪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">關(guān)山別舊攬新梅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">詩鐘七唱?柳春</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一唱·鳳頂格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳綻東樓飄幾絮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春溫北苑暖千家</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二唱·燕頷格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫩柳萌蘇阡陌綠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陽春育孕紫園蔥</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三唱·鳶肩格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">依欄柳絮添幽趣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">帶露春風(fēng)送異香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四唱·蜂腰格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清明看柳疏新色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">谷雨臨春寄月情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五唱·鶴膝格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清溪碧草柳生瑞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遠(yuǎn)岫流云春綻明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六唱·鳧脛格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曙色調(diào)風(fēng)攜柳燕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">韶光澤露潤春苗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七唱·雁足格</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">城郊添秀梧桐柳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云水還田旦暮春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">詩鐘七唱·風(fēng)雨</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">草稿/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨落長安升紫氣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)回蜀道起嵐煙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">細(xì)雨酣淋滋陌野</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">東風(fēng)勁舞嘯蒼穹</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">輕沾雨露祥輝涌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">淺拂風(fēng)塵瑞氣生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">綿綿細(xì)雨澤天下</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">縷縷柔風(fēng)寄海涯</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五唱</span></p><p class="ql-block">生涯韻律雨彈奏</p><p class="ql-block">歲月心神風(fēng)周旋</p><p class="ql-block">六唱</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盛世年間祈雨霽</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">太平國里望風(fēng)和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">碧落丹丘添瑞雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霞飛滄海濟(jì)清風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">絕句最新版</span></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕，巾幗頌</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">檐梅望李暗添香，墨韻書窗綺彩章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">巾幗堪肩承淑德，須眉不讓世流芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">（檐梅→淑女，李→賢君）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·北國尋春</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅爐煮酒春來早，暮雪烹茶意未遲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫陌尋芳追綺夢，耕耘塞外鎮(zhèn)邊陲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">驚蟄有感（下平七陽）</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上善若水/新疆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春雷蟄始驚天曉，玉露凝珠滴翠香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫氣浮煙田影動，清輝拂面托丹陽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·二月二（上平十灰）</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二月蟄驚龍舉首，屠蘇素帳韻初開。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">田疇布谷催耕垅，國泰年豐福運(yùn)來。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">附：屠蘇這里指草庵堂舍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·題逸韻軒詩社</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上善若水/新疆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逸韻文壇邀異客，通途瑰寶覽佳章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">筆耕瀚海雄心在，歲月甄詩有墨香。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七律·逸韻軒詩社賀詞</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逸韻文軒沁墨香，儒林翰苑詠華章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春潮好映蘭燈凈，客路堪追綺夢長。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">妙筆培元蘇乳杏，賢師栽蘗育新篁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">群英聚首呈書卷，賀典詩壇國粹揚(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">詩家人讀詩：</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 主題明確，情感真摯。該詩圍繞“逸韻軒詩社”展開，賀詞對詩社的贊美與祝福，主題鮮明，緊扣詩社核心。字里行間洋溢著對詩社的喜愛與期待，從詩社文化氛圍，詩社成員創(chuàng)作成果及未來發(fā)展的期許，情感熱烈且真誠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.意象豐富：運(yùn)用了諸多富有文化內(nèi)涵的意象，“墨香”“儒林翰苑”營造出濃厚的文化藝術(shù)氛圍；“蘭燈”寓意光明與指引，象征詩社如明燈照亮文學(xué)之路；“乳杏”“新篁”代表新生資源，巧用典故“好映蘭燈凈，堪追綺夢長”形容大好前景，培育杰岀英才。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 2.意境高雅：整體營造出一種高雅、充滿文化氣息的意境，仿佛讓人置身于文人墨客匯聚，吟詩賦詞的典雅場所。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 3.語言優(yōu)美：用詞精巧，如“沁墨香”“詠華章”“培元”“栽蘗”等，語言富有文采，典雅且凝練，展現(xiàn)出作者較高的文字功底。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 4.韻律和諧：作為七律，嚴(yán)格遵循格律要求，平仄協(xié)調(diào)，押韻準(zhǔn)確，讀起來節(jié)奏明快，朗朗上口，韻律優(yōu)美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 5.結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)：首聯(lián)點(diǎn)明逸韻軒詩社充滿墨香，文人雅士在此詠誦華章，開篇點(diǎn)題；頷聯(lián)從不同角度，以“春潮”“客路”為切入點(diǎn)，表達(dá)對詩社發(fā)展前景的展望；頸聯(lián)著重強(qiáng)調(diào)詩社對新人的培育作用；尾聯(lián)則回到當(dāng)下，描繪群英聚首，借詩社慶典弘揚(yáng)國粹的場景，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，起承轉(zhuǎn)合自然流暢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.意象稍顯傳統(tǒng)化，部分意象在創(chuàng)新方面略有欠缺，整體表述悄淺薄，對于詩社獨(dú)特的文化價(jià)值等方面挖掘不夠，未留回味思考空間。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 總體而言，這首七律是一首合格的詩社賀詞，在韻律、語言及結(jié)構(gòu)上表現(xiàn)出色，若能在內(nèi)容深度和意象創(chuàng)新上加以提升，會更具藝術(shù)感染力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????</span></p>