1.七絕·上川島攬勝<br data-filtered="filtered">王懷堯<br data-filtered="filtered">（一）<br data-filtered="filtered">上川島上鷺鷗翔，海與山連氣勢(shì)昂。<br data-filtered="filtered">只見風(fēng)車迷目處，騷人筆下醉汪洋。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】格律準(zhǔn)確，轉(zhuǎn)合的有點(diǎn)陡。個(gè)見！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（二）<br data-filtered="filtered">驚濤滾滾醉眸呆，帆影翩翩意景開。<br data-filtered="filtered">浪吻朝霞邀遠(yuǎn)客，風(fēng)光旖旎似蓬萊。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】格律準(zhǔn)確。意景，意境？首句有湊韻之嫌。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（三）<br data-filtered="filtered">碧海藍(lán)天景色奇，追波快艇水中馳。<br data-filtered="filtered">數(shù)聲鳴笛數(shù)聲韻，一路風(fēng)光一路詩。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】格律準(zhǔn)確，數(shù)字改為幾字體會(huì)一下怎么樣？<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（四）<br data-filtered="filtered">留連島上盡徘徊，望海船行碧水開。<br data-filtered="filtered">一縷霞輝光艷艷，千帆破浪日邊來。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】格律準(zhǔn)確，整個(gè)布局尚可，詞語可進(jìn)一步精煉。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（五）<br data-filtered="filtered">此行歡悅滿心頭，一路詩情寄水流。<br data-filtered="filtered">墨客臺(tái)山尋勝境，今朝川島樂春游。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】格律準(zhǔn)確，表達(dá)了春游勝境的喜悅心情。感謝賜稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>2.沁園春·采風(fēng)巨龍湖<br data-filtered="filtered">霍元<br data-filtered="filtered">氣爽風(fēng)清，光和景明，友聚誼誠。賀高山流水，圣湖掠影；承唐繼宋，敬友尊朋。靜賞魚姿，閑觀鶴影，古韻新聲詩意泓。初心駐，品書香格律，文苑爭(zhēng)鳴。<br data-filtered="filtered">開機(jī)攝像留型，調(diào)焦距、語輕愜意縈?？刺禊Z振翅，鷺鷥梳羽，征鴻停渚，信鴿棲亭。傳令飛花，尋幽覽勝，法水師山享世榮。豪情壯，頌如歌歲月，國粹傳承。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】本詞牌共有 7 種格式，作品采用的格式是 格一蘇軾（孤館燈青）：雙調(diào)一百十四字，前段十三句四平韻，后段十二句五平韻，詞格準(zhǔn)確。這首沁園春在用詞上古樸與現(xiàn)代結(jié)合，情景交融，氣勢(shì)恢宏。寫在春和景明的季節(jié)，詩人們湖邊采風(fēng)的情景，賞景抒情并敘，很有代入感。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>3.【中呂·蘇武持節(jié)】京通運(yùn)河<br data-filtered="filtered">張東升<br data-filtered="filtered">長河水路，漕船如鶩，京通一線生財(cái)富。丈藤粗，四肢枯，萬民勞作流年負(fù)。華夏開天驚壯舉。功，載帝書；名，耀圣圖。<br data-filtered="filtered">(丈藤：拉纖用的不沾水的粗繩。)<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】 "丈藤粗"與"四肢枯"形成強(qiáng)烈反差，既展現(xiàn)運(yùn)河經(jīng)濟(jì)動(dòng)脈作用，又揭示其背后的民生勞苦。"功，載帝書；名，耀圣圖"用互文手法，暗含對(duì)歷史書寫的反思。感謝賜稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>4.如夢(mèng)令·春香<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀清（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">簾外日高風(fēng)暖。細(xì)草煙波拍岸，翠鳥柳枝啼，幾樹花開嬌軟。香遠(yuǎn)。香遠(yuǎn)?；ㄓ鞍挡厣钤?。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯天瑤點(diǎn)評(píng)】意境優(yōu)美，充滿春天的氣息，首句拉開鏡頭，交代時(shí)間空間，鳥鳴與花開交相呼應(yīng)，春意盎然，尾句有庭院深深深幾許的悠然感，花香沁人心脾！感謝賜稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">5.七絕·覓香<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀清（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">堤邊踱步覓芳春，未見新林香染身。<br data-filtered="filtered">切盼今時(shí)花綻蕊，方能樹下笑聲頻。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯李繼紅點(diǎn)評(píng)】作品格律準(zhǔn)確，語言簡(jiǎn)練而富有韻味，整體風(fēng)格清新自然。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>6.【當(dāng)日推薦】七絕·路燈<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀明（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">長街短巷挺纖身，何慕初陽暖玉塵。<br data-filtered="filtered">四季風(fēng)霜皆不屑，欣同明月照歸人。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯李繼紅點(diǎn)評(píng)】作品格律準(zhǔn)確，以擬人筆法塑路燈品格，“挺”、“慕”、“屑”等動(dòng)詞運(yùn)用增強(qiáng)了畫面感。構(gòu)思精當(dāng)。"挺纖身"顯風(fēng)骨，"暖玉塵"稍欠明晰，可酌。時(shí)空意象交織（街巷/四季，明月/歸人）見巧思，末句升華溫暖意蘊(yùn)足。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">7.七絕·春日尋芳（新韻）<br data-filtered="filtered">赫安澤<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">暖日尋芳興致深，多情光景使人新。<br data-filtered="filtered">山清柳綠喜盈眼，溪水潺潺還數(shù)春。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯李繼紅點(diǎn)評(píng)】作品格律準(zhǔn)確，通過對(duì)春日美景的細(xì)膩描繪，展現(xiàn)對(duì)美好事物的向往。意境優(yōu)美，情感真摯。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">8.春日書懷<br data-filtered="filtered">劉成華<br data-filtered="filtered">孤燈挑盡硯冰滋，漢魄唐魂沁墨池。<br data-filtered="filtered">垂露懸針參篆籀，偃波折股悟神奇。<br data-filtered="filtered">毫端吞吐三更月，袖里空藏五色絲。<br data-filtered="filtered">且把幽懷付烏玉，松煙笑我作書癡。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯李繼紅點(diǎn)評(píng)】作品格律準(zhǔn)確,對(duì)仗工整，整首詩流露出一種對(duì)書法藝術(shù)的熱愛與追求，表達(dá)了對(duì)傳統(tǒng)文化的敬仰。硯冰：硯水凍成的冰。墨池指硯。垂露、懸針為豎的兩種寫法。</div><div>偃波即偃波書，即版書，狀如連文，為頒發(fā)詔命所用。折股：“折釵股”的筆法，指轉(zhuǎn)折處的雖彎曲盤繞仍圓潤飽滿，將轉(zhuǎn)折節(jié)點(diǎn)隱藏起來的點(diǎn)畫。五色絲的五色代表五行，五色線之俗源于我國古代的五行觀念，古代崇尚五色，以五色為吉祥色。烏玉玦：墨的別名。松煙指墨。篆籀：篆文和籀文。全詩墨香透紙，文人意趣橫生。專業(yè)術(shù)語稍顯匠氣，普通讀者易生隔膜；而且硯、墨的意象重復(fù)，"五色絲"意象稍顯突兀。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>9.采桑子·桃之夭夭<br data-filtered="filtered">張清彬<br data-filtered="filtered">人間三月芳菲競(jìng)，灼灼桃花。滿徑芬葩，風(fēng)過枝搖香漫涯。<br data-filtered="filtered">武陵曾記迷人處，夢(mèng)繞紅霞。淺笑無邪，引得詩心醉物華。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯李繼紅點(diǎn)評(píng)】詞的用韻和節(jié)奏流暢，整體語言清新自然，通過對(duì)桃花的描繪，展現(xiàn)了春天的生機(jī)與美好，同時(shí)也蘊(yùn)含了對(duì)過往美好時(shí)光的懷念。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">10.七絕·接龍<br data-filtered="filtered">雒少華<br data-filtered="filtered">遙望南天屢上樓，白云抽絮紡紗悠。<br data-filtered="filtered">織成綺秀女工美，裁就相思暗自羞。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯孟憲麗點(diǎn)評(píng)】七絕一首，合律?！辈镁拖嗨及底孕摺！背霾?。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">11.沁園春·春日壯懷<br data-filtered="filtered">李長江<br data-filtered="filtered">大地回春，冰河解凍，錦鱗戲塘。看柳枝云舞，輕舟蕩槳；瑤池月映，雅士尋芳。逸韻風(fēng)煙，歡聲波浪，瞻望飄云且起行。心情爽，賦新詞頌詠，任志飛揚(yáng)。<br data-filtered="filtered">夢(mèng)思錦繡時(shí)光，韶華季、覽書映雪窗。志心懷報(bào)國，投身軍旅；情思衛(wèi)土，折柳家鄉(xiāng)。歲月如流，初心不忘，破浪長風(fēng)逐遠(yuǎn)航。展前路，待宏圖大展，再譜華章。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯孟憲麗點(diǎn)評(píng)】沁園春一闋，豪邁，磅礴，有春日生發(fā)之氣象。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>12.水調(diào)歌頭·十年耕耘六萬詩豐（格一毛滂體）<br data-filtered="filtered">赫安澤<br data-filtered="filtered">傳承于今夕，博雅寫驚奇。十年勤奮掾筆，持續(xù)展旌旗。六萬珠璣揮灑，五百鳳凰棲處，雅韻滿方蹊。遙峰出青染，芳草盡香迷。<br data-filtered="filtered">流韻美，詞賦醉，正逢時(shí)。滿園豐盛，花蕊吐艷正如期。榮繼唐風(fēng)宋雨，墨泌龍章鳳藻，心曠滿神怡。攜手登山唱，眺望彩星馳。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯孟憲麗點(diǎn)評(píng)】水調(diào)歌頭一闋，詞作恢宏大氣，贊頌了博雅詩人筆耕不輟的向上精神。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">13.七絕?春思（通韻）<br data-filtered="filtered">高寶霞（郝好）<br data-filtered="filtered">細(xì)柳隨風(fēng)逐日新，夭桃吐艷景迷人。<br data-filtered="filtered">眾生莫道花期短，歲月長河綠意深。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯孟憲麗點(diǎn)評(píng)】全詩合律合韻。起承轉(zhuǎn)合自然，滿滿春意。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">14.七絕?春景（通韻）<br data-filtered="filtered">高寶霞（郝好）<br data-filtered="filtered">無邊陌野換新裝，一片耕圖入畫廊。<br data-filtered="filtered">待到春風(fēng)吹雨后，青芽破土韻悠長。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【編輯孟憲麗點(diǎn)評(píng)】全詩合律合韻。清新，上口，盡顯初春的氣息。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">15.七絕·南運(yùn)河迎春花<br data-filtered="filtered">鄢一丹<br data-filtered="filtered">曉寒嫩蕊吐鵝黃，瘦蔓低垂吻草香。<br data-filtered="filtered">莫道春歸無覓處，一灣花影醉東皇。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"><div>【編輯刁寧點(diǎn)評(píng)】這首絕句筆法細(xì)膩，靈動(dòng)。前兩句近描迎春花之身柔意堅(jiān)，轉(zhuǎn)句化用白詩"春歸無覓處"卻指春來，"一灣花影"以遠(yuǎn)景之燦爛寫春之鮮活。意脈因轉(zhuǎn)句略不暢，首二句已經(jīng)寫春歸，轉(zhuǎn)句無由。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">16.五絕·江南春岸<br data-filtered="filtered">萬勁波<br data-filtered="filtered">輕舟搖綠水，粉女笑迎霞。<div>石板深幽巷，小哥賣杏花。<br data-filtered="filtered"></div></div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【編輯刁寧點(diǎn)評(píng)】尾句孤平。詩境婉約飄逸，造語輕俊嫵媚。</div></div></div>